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to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many individuals argue that it is better if the
food
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 needed to feed the local inhabitants of each country is produced by themselves
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 of importing from other regions. I totally agree with these people since it generates job opportunities and the
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 can be less expensive for the final consumers. The main reason why I believe countries should produce the
food
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 they need is that the unemployment rate would drop significantly.
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 some people think that not every country has the men-force to produce their own
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, in my opinion with the right training and technology nothing is impossible. To produce the
food
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, many farms would have to be created and processing and distribution industries would have an increased demand for workers.
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, thousands of job opportunities would be generated for the locals. To illustrate, Brazil does not import large quantities of coffee from other countries and
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 industry employs an immense amount of Brazilians. Another reason why importing
food
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 from other parts of the world is not very advantageous is that the
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 end up costing a fortune.
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 I concede that having
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 from other countries available at local shops is great since there is more diversity of options, the amount of money they cost is not worth it. These
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 have to travel unimaginable distances overseas which is extremely expensive and takes a lot of time.
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 that, there are the importation fees which are attached to the final price people pay at their local grocery store without even knowing about it. In conclusion, I reaffirm my opinion that each country should try to produce the
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 to feed their own population since it can create thousands of new work opportunities for their inhabitants and would considerably lower the price of many
products
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.
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