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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#computer #effects #children
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computer
 play a crucial role in
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everyday
 life.
children
 like to work on
computer
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the computer
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 and they learn many new
things
 from the
computer
 which is helpful to them in future. According to my point of
view
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computer
 have
a positive effects
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a positive effect
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 on
everyday
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 life of
chilldren
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children
. Every coin has two sides like head and tail so
same
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 with the technology it depends
to
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 the
children
 how it takes the benefit of
the
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that. Today in
this
 modern era
computer
 is very important to get
things
 done at
time
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 . we all know about
this
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pandemic
 condition nobody allowed to go outside . And online study
help
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children
 to learn and get
there
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 subjects done. they make
there
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their
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 assignments on
computer
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the computer
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 and submit
to
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them to
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 their teacher online. If there is no technology how they fight
with
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that virus .
Furthermore
,
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children
childrens
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children
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 are important to their parents they should keep eye on
there
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their
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 kids that they use
computer
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a computer
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 in a wrong or right manner or what they
are learn
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 on there check them twice . how they use the
computer
 they learn
things
 from that or they just play games on laptops . Parents need to help
ther
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their
the
children
 to show them educational sites or eductions games which help them to improve
there
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 skills.
Sowith
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So with
With
this
 way
computer
have
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 positive effects , In conclusion,
i
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 just wanna say that
every thing
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everything
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have
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a
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both pros and cons so
its
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they
it
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 depend upon us how we get
the
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things
. so if we get positively
then
 all the effects are positive
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 helpful in our future .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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