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some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change the future? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are many people
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 an argument about galaxy exploration. Some of them tell that it should be done by only one nation, while
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 guess that
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 problem and it must carry out by many sciences from different cultures.
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, 21 century is
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 of globalization and the internet, so there are many opportunities to make international
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 and conversation, even
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 person can do it
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 if he has access to the internet. Space is a huge mystic and it
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 been observed
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many times,
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 it still disorientates many
scientists
. They cannot solve
this
 problem by themselves,
although
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 been developed to
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 level, people still cannot find out the answers with great ease.
This
 type of problem astronomers should not ignore,
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, if they had had
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 team, it would
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 better for them.
Secondly
, there are might be a lot of envious and misunderstanding, which can provoke
scientists
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 hurting one another. It will quarrels in the future because of different new formulas and schemes, which are not the same in different countries. They will do
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 of experiments by own to prove that they were right,
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 the money
scientists
 will spend far big. There will robberies that
scientists
 do in the future to achieve the answers faster than their opponent. To prevent waste of money and energy they must work together. To sum up all the arguments above, I am comprehensively convinced that working together will avoid many useless spent time and money that may cause to
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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