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some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change the future? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are many people
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 an argument about galaxy exploration. Some of them tell that it should be done by only one nation, while
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 guess that
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 task is general for several countries. From my perspective, I believe that
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 problem and it must carry out by many sciences from different cultures.
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, 21 century is
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 of globalization and the internet, so there are many opportunities to make international
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 and conversation, even
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 person can do it
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 if he has access to the internet. Space is a huge mystic and it
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 been observed
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many times,
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 it still disorientates many
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. They cannot solve
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 problem by themselves,
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science
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 been developed to
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 level, people still cannot find out the answers with great ease.
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 type of problem astronomers should not ignore,
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, if they had had
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 team, it would
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 better for them.
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, there are might be a lot of envious and misunderstanding, which can provoke
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 hurting one another. It will quarrels in the future because of different new formulas and schemes, which are not the same in different countries. They will do
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 of experiments by own to prove that they were right,
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however
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 the money
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 will spend far big. There will robberies that
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 do in the future to achieve the answers faster than their opponent. To prevent waste of money and energy they must work together. To sum up all the arguments above, I am comprehensively convinced that working together will avoid many useless spent time and money that may cause to
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 of one of the sophisticated problems.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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