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As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units. What are the causes of this trend and what are the effects on society?

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Undoubtedly, Family is very crucial for every individual as well as it helps in each and every moment. Due to the largely growing ,population people would like to be a small family. There are several reasons behind
this
 and create a large impact on society which I will discuss in upcoming paragraphs. In contemporary, the main reason is man-making money and huge expenses.
however
, every person is working in
this
 modern era as well as they are more independent these days. Due to
this
 reason, each individual is capable to take their daily- living spend own and they do not want to share their own money with any family member. At
last
 but not least, the other reason that everyone wants private space in their lives.
Furthermore
, the
next
 generations do not like it if their parents ask any question regarding personal life.
Moreover
, if anyone put the question on any topic than children think that they are interfering in their life so do not respect to parent's decisions. Due to the more interference
young
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 generation wants to live separately and make their own rules.
On the other hand
, it creates a huge impact on society.
Likewise
, there are several psychological and social problems occurring these days
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society.
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  • urbanization
  • migration
  • limited living space
  • economic independence
  • nuclear families
  • social norms
  • isolation
  • mental health issues
  • real estate market
  • housing shortages
  • social care
  • extended family networks
  • public provision
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