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Some people have opinion that faster way to enhance skills of children is to do enjoyable activity rather than reading

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Certain demographics of society believe that a faster approach to upskill
children
 is to make learning a fun activity,
instead
 of reading.
This
 essay agrees with
this
 statement. In my ,opinion
children
 can learn fast in an entertaining
way
 like learning from cartoon movies and signing rhymes.
Firstly
, most of the
children
's feel stressed by the traditional
way
 of reading and learning from books because learning the subject from a book is a new activity for the little ones.It is better to start their learning process in an entertaining
way
, and later we can slowly switch them to books at a later stage.
This
 approach of learning relives the stress from
children
 and makes learning an easier and quicker process for them.
Secondly
, it is noticed that
children
 can grasp things faster from the activities to which they are most attracted.
For example
,
children
 can learn a new language in a short time by watching a cartoon series, alphabets and numbers listening to rhymes and writing by painting a cartoon.
Furthermore
, the
children
 skill development search institute conducted research on a thousand
children
's from different geographical locations by dividing them into two groups. For one
group
, the source of education was reading whereas for another
group
, the source of education was watching educational programmes on television, and at the end of the research, it is proved that the digital media
group
 is faster in learning the subject
then
 the
group
 of book reading
children
. In conclusion, few people believe that the fun
way
 of learning is faster for
children
then
 book reading. I agree with
this
 opinion, learning mixed with entertainment makes
children
 understand the subject fast when compared with reading.
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