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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many
people
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 think that
pollution
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 issues should be solved by the ministry because it is huge for one person;
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,other think that individual should start thinking about the environmental harm than and
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 it would be solved by the
government
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.I
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 think that everyone should play their role to save the environment. Starting with the
people
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 who think that it's a huge problem and only the
government
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 can solve it,they are right at some point.there are many rules that can be imposed by the
government
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 and
people
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 have to follow them.
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,PUC for each and every vehicle should be lower than 70%.whinch means hat less carbon emission.Another thing is its ruling party's responsibility to control
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pollution
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 and provide a good atmosphere.It is
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 easy for the ruling party to stop the harming effect on nature by enforcing the new law.the leading party can
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 arrange some awareness program related to
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pollution
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 and it can help to improve the good quality of air and many more.
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,the have to aware citizens about the side effect of all the chemical and gases.
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 ,everything can be possible if an individual is putting their effort to make the environment clean and neat.If one person starts doing it the other will follow that person,
people
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 have to think that it's their own responsibility to keep their surrounding clean than and
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 governments all policy and awareness going to work more efficiently.
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, if I started cleaning my driveway and my neighbours will start doing it, and in the ,end there maybe millions of
people
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 who will do the same to save the world. To conclude, It not only the
government
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's job to take the burden and save the environment,but the individual
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 has to take some responsibility for
pollution
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 control.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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