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Some people believe that government is responsible for disadvantaged people like jobless and homeless. do you agree or disagree?

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Some would argue that government authorities are entirely reasonable for unemployed and homeless
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. I completely agree with
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 statement because the cabinet’s policies and plans are sometimes not thoughtful which affects
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’s lives.
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, if the tax
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 had been used in a beneficial way, there would not be unemployment and
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 without a home.
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 with, plans and policies passed by ministries are often not quite thoughtful as it has a significant effect on
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. These laws affect the livelihood of common working-class individuals, especially the ones working labour
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, through increased goods prices and unexpected changes that could alter daily routines.
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 it affects educated skilled workers, they are not tremendously affected compared to the
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 doing blue-collar
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.
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, the Indian government banned the usage of 500 and 1000 rupee notes a few years ago which resulted in a lot of
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 losing their
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 and some of them could not afford to pay home rents, and eventually had to vacate their rented places.
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, a government has sufficient funds to help the needy through the acquired tax
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 from their citizens.
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, they should consider the welfare of their society and individuals by helping
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 poor
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.
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,
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 is sometimes not the case in some countries as the tax
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 is not used for society’s benefits but to build tourist attractions.
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, in Australia, they have a scheme called ‘Center Link’ through which these disadvantaged
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 are given
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 for their survival.
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 a scheme can be extremely helpful for these
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 but why would some governments do not take
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 responsibilities? In conclusion, I think authorities should take responsibility for helping
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 without
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 and homes as they were pushed to
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, governments have sufficient funds required to improve the life of the needy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social safety net
  • Economic stability
  • Unemployment benefits
  • Financial security
  • Economic downturn
  • Poverty
  • Stimulate the economy
  • Job seeking
  • Dependency culture
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Government expenditure
  • Labor market
  • Fraud
  • Welfare abuse
  • Quality of life
  • Budget constraints
  • Economic strain
  • Public funds
  • Employment incentives
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