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Technology like AI and Robotics are automating many human jobs and helping maximize company profits. However, this may result in a new wave of mass unemployment and the Government should step in to regulate these fields. Discuss both sides of this argument.

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Introduction
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this
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 modern
world
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people
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 have become more dependant on technology because the amount of time it requires is very less than any human intervention which has help
buisness
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business
businesses
 earn huge margins of profit but at the same
time
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 it has created
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a
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class of workless
people
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.
Firstly
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, my essay will talk about, how newer technologies
has
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 helped industries flourish without any
interfernce
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interference
 of
man kind
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mankind
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? and
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, how it has affected individuals in losing their
livelyhood
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livelihood
.
Body paragraph 1
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 with, latest technologies are being brought by every major
industries
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 like Production, Medicine, Machinery and Food etc and more it can be seen that jobs done by the devices are much of better quality and at
quicker
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a quicker
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 pace which has directly resulted in the profit margins of the company. Mechanization has enabled mass production for manufacturers and when it comes to
cooking
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the cooking
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 industry,
people
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 are able to cook at home and deliveries are done through Drones.
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, during
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the pandemic
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 in many places food and medicine deliveries were done through Flying gadgets.
Body paragraph 2
In Contrast
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, Due to automation
lot
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a lot
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 of
people
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 have lost their jobs at Mills, Factories,
Resturants
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Restaurants
 and even at
hospital
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the hospital
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, we cannot deny the fact of the time
efficency
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efficiency
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 achievable by the introduction of machines
but
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it comes with high cost.
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Government
Goverment
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The goverment
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 needs to find
solution
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a solution
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 where humans and bots can work together and peoples
livelyhood
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livelihood
 remain intact.
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, Authorities can come up with new schemes where employers are rewarded for hiring clans of
people
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Conclusion
To Conclude, I am of the opinion that high tech machines are useful but power
people
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 should make sure that countrymen
dont
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don't
 lose their
livelyhood
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livelihood
.

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