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Some people believe that a job provides both income and for a social life, while others think that friends should be made outside of work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays we spend the majority of our time
in
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work
 to meet our financial needs and even we can make new
friends
. Some people believe that
work
 should be restricted to making money, but others think they can have a balance of both.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide evidence as to why having both social and financial life is more superior. Some people take
work
 seriously focusing only on how to maintain their income due to several reasons.
Firstly
, they believe any distraction including having
friendship
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 with their co-workers
in
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work
 might affect their performance.
For example
, more side talks with their colleagues might waste time. Another reason is, they think
friends
 at
work
 might not be trustworthy to share with them your
work
 updates. They tend to make their
work
 confidential.
For instance
, there might be one of your co-workers who takes an idea that you told him that you are thinking about and share it as his idea.
On the other hand
, other people believe that having
friends
 will be an add on to their
work
 in different ways.
First
 of all,
this
 will increase teamwork and sharing experiences with each other. I read an article that states that teamwork makes businesses more successful.
Secondly
, having
friends
 will relieve
work
 stress and
thus
 making you more focused and productive. I remember
my
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first
 job I tried making
friends
 but my co-workers were so strict,
this
 made me hate going to
work
. In my opinion, having a balance between
work
 and making new friendships at
work
 is the best scenario. You will be able to learn from other people’s experience and decrease your stress level.
Although
, I think we must take caution when making
friends
 at
work
 and have enough trust before sharing any
work
 updates.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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