Some people believe that a job provides both income and for a social life, while others think that friends should be made outside of work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays we spend the majority of our time
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to meet our financial needs and even we can make new
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. Some people believe that
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should be restricted to making money, but others think they can have a balance of both.
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essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide evidence as to why having both social and financial life is more superior. Some people take
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seriously focusing only on how to maintain their income due to several reasons.
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, they believe any distraction including having
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with their co-workers
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might affect their performance.
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, more side talks with their colleagues might waste time. Another reason is, they think
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at
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might not be trustworthy to share with them your
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updates. They tend to make their
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confidential.
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, there might be one of your co-workers who takes an idea that you told him that you are thinking about and share it as his idea.
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, other people believe that having
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will be an add on to their
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in different ways.
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of all,
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will increase teamwork and sharing experiences with each other. I read an article that states that teamwork makes businesses more successful.
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, having
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will relieve
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stress and
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making you more focused and productive. I remember
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job I tried making
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but my co-workers were so strict,
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made me hate going to
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. In my opinion, having a balance between
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and making new friendships at
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is the best scenario. You will be able to learn from other people’s experience and decrease your stress level.
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, I think we must take caution when making
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at
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and have enough trust before sharing any
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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