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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected personal relationships? Has this become a positive or negative development?

#people #technology #relationships #become #development
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technology
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 has dramatic
change
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inchange
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 the
relantionship
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relationship
 between
people
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. In the
past
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people
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 in general (young and old)
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spend
spended
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spent
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 much more
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 outdoor having real social
conection
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connection
. Nowadays
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people
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 spend much more
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 at home, alone, in front of a screen. The
comunication
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communication
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 a sharply change since the
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make
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much
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it much
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 more easer and
chiper
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cheaper
chipper
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remotly
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remotely
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video games, computers and
celphones
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cellphones
cell phones
 the children used to having fun around the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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, playing games with a lot of physical interaction. Soccer, basketball
,
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 and
much
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many
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 other sports were played just in
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"real
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" (not virtual). Nowadays,
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children spend a lot of
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 playing sports on
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video games. Adults
also
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life style
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lifestyle
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. Currently, we have many options
of
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homeoffice
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home office
 works, which decreases a lot our social relationship.
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other hand
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, the internet and
technology
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 make
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it easer
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easer
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easier
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 to keep in touch with friends and parents
which
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who
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 live far away.
The social
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Social
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 media reduce
time
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 distance from the
people
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 and allow us to know how the
life
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 of our
closely
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 friends are going on. There are positive and negative aspects of
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this
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these
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 changes in our social
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lives
life
lifes
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lives
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. Even
the
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technology
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 make the
comunication
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communication
 much
more fast
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faster
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 and easy, we are spending much more
time
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 alone. It is proved that the
adction
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action
 of social media can be very prejudice for our mint and social behaviour. It is important for the adults and
also
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 their children find a safe way to enjoy those new technologies and keep see your friends and
collegues
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colleagues
on
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 the "real
life
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".
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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