The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figures illustrate the
number
of international and local
students
who enrolled in the university in Australia between 2001 to 2010.
While
the
number
of international
students
was growing, the
number
of local
students
was fluctuating over a decade period. In 2001, the
number
of new international applicants
of
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the
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university in Australia is around 10000 pupils and it had an inclined trend.
However
, the trend was weakling in 2010 because the enrollment
number
was not as high as in previous years, it only had around 40000 new applicants. It made the total
number
of foreign college
students
in Australia from 20000 in 2001 and rocketed to 80000 in 2010.
On the other hand
, the
number
of new local applicants
was
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noticeable
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fluctuate between 2001 to 2010. It had approximately 200000 new
students
every year. The locals were indeed the majority in the universities with total
students
of 400000 in 2001, but the total
number
was constant
around
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60000 from 2007 to 2010.
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