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Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that tree plantation should take place in empty spaces in urban areas more than the construction of homes. I completely agree with
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 statement. The current atmospheric condition is abominable. It is trees that can find a resolution to
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 problem whereas, building more
houses
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 could result in grave danger to the
environment
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.
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, the way trees exhale Carbon-di-oxide and human beings emit Oxygen, assists to keep our
environment
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 healthy and balanced. Since
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 are living in a city for a long time, they already have places for their accommodation.
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, if the majority tends to feel like building more infrastructures, the fundamental components that are required for living, might get affected.
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, along with tree plantation, there should be legislation for deforestation too. Another thing that should be taken into account that
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 can live even without
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 but can’t
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 long in a badly affected
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, in
Bangladesh
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 there are thousands of
people
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 who do not have roofs on their head. Though they live may live along the street or footpaths, they are able to survive.
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, there are plenty of
people
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 who are making their
houses
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 in rural areas to get rid of
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 dreadful atmosphere. Because of
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 inevitable circumstances,
people
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 should be more concerned about utilizing the blank spaces of both cities and towns. To conclude, though there are some issues of not having structured accommodation, they can be sorted out.
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, if the
environment
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 becomes more imbalanced, the earth will become inhabitable. Henceforth, tree plantation should be prioritized rather than building
houses
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.
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