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Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #person #culture #country #origin #influence
The given table illustrates
student
 financial resources in the United Kingdom over a span of ten years. (For a university professor, write
apaper
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a paper
paper
 explaining the details shown below.) Overall, when looked at the table in general, in ten years period,
Student
 resources with
Student
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 loan, earning and other internal income increased while
student
 resources with parental contribution and grant external income decreased. It is worth noticing that
interel
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internal
interest
 income of
student
indicate
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 a rise
about
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 50%.
Bsides
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,
student
 loan
be
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 the most increase among the three and ıt
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is improved
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from 0% to 24%.
Furthermore
, grand and parental contribution significantly
reducted
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reduced
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 to 50%. İn
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other hand
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, both were 16% and 14% respectively.
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