Some people believe that young people know about the international pop and movies stars but know less about famous people from the history in there own country .why is this? How can be more interest be created in young people to gain more knowledge about their own famous people from history

Few individuals claim that today's youth is
familar
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familiar
about global celebs but know minor information about their history and eminent people .
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to explore what are the reasons for
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and some possible solutions to
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problem. The most important factor is the educational system of most countries is test-based.They only taught how to achieve good grades,
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students focus to pass the exams and not interested to acquire knowledge about
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topic.For
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they have
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in
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knowledge related to
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the history
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and personalities of the past.
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, in nuclear families parents are busy working and do not spend quality time with
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children
children's
,
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history has taken
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seat.
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, Youngsters are fascinated
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celeberities
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celebrities
because of
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and importance shown to them by
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.There are many possible
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to overcome
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, parents, schools, and media can play
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role
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aware modern generation about past events
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and should organise functions on special occasions
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as Quaid-e-Azam day , Iqbal day and national independence day.In
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offspring come to know the past incidents.
Furthermore
, schools must encourage students to participate in tours toward
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historical
places and museums.To illustrate,the museum of Rashid Minhas is a great source of information as it reflects struggles and sacrifices during the war of independence.
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must establish museums for people and subsidize them for
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the public
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. To conclude, many steps
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to
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develop
interest in youth parents, schools and media are major sources.
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