Some people believe that charity organizations should give aid to those in greatest need, wherever they live. Other people believe that charity organizations should concentrate on the people in their own country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People
have mixed views on the duty of
charity
groups. While some individuals believe that
charity
funds should be used to help those in greatest need, regardless of
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nationality, others argue that it is more important to subsidise residents in their own country. I agree with the latter. On the one hand, there are some reasons for giving the priority of aid to those who struggle to survive around the world.
Firstly
, hunger is still a severe problem in many regions, particularly in which suffered from wars and drought. Both political and natural effects result in
the
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wide-spread hunger. It is reasonable for
charity
groups like NGO to provide international aid to help these
people
survive.
Secondly
,
healthcare
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system in many developing nations is poor, which results in high death rates of
children
.
For example
, women who have no access to hospitals have to give birth to their
children
at home, which would put both mothers and babies in danger. Since food and health
problems
relate directly to human survival,
charity
organisations should help these
people
at
first
.
On the other hand
, some
people
argue that we cannot distinguish who is the person in
greatest
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need and it is local charities' responsibility to deal with domestic
problems
. There are
also
many deprived areas in each country, and a large number of residents live in poverty even in developed countries. Taking China as an example, a great number of
children
are left at home with their grandparents because their parents have to immigrate to big cities to find jobs. These
children
not only lack economic support, but
also
interactions with family members. Perhaps these
problems
are not as emergency as hunger, but it is
also
imperative and would affect
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generation's growth. From
this
perspective, I believe that
charity
funds should be allocated to support domestic inhabitants. In conclusion, while international aid is necessary, I agree that it is more important to focus on domestic
problems
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charity organizations
  • aid
  • greatest need
  • equality
  • fair distribution
  • resources
  • universal value
  • compassion
  • humanitarianism
  • global stability
  • economic growth
  • local needs
  • national unity
  • quality of life
  • social cohesion
  • inequality
  • domestic communities
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