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Some people believe that charity organizations should give aid to those in greatest need, wherever they live. Other people believe that charity organizations should concentrate on the people in their own country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #charity #organizations #aid #country
People
 have mixed views on the duty of
charity
 groups. While some individuals believe that
charity
 funds should be used to help those in greatest need, regardless of
the
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nationality, others argue that it is more important to subsidise residents in their own country. I agree with the latter. On the one hand, there are some reasons for giving the priority of aid to those who struggle to survive around the world.
Firstly
, hunger is still a severe problem in many regions, particularly in which suffered from wars and drought. Both political and natural effects result in
the
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wide-spread hunger. It is reasonable for
charity
 groups like NGO to provide international aid to help these
people
 survive.
Secondly
,
healthcare
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 system in many developing nations is poor, which results in high death rates of
children
.
For example
, women who have no access to hospitals have to give birth to their
children
 at home, which would put both mothers and babies in danger. Since food and health
problems
 relate directly to human survival,
charity
 organisations should help these
people
 at
first
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 argue that we cannot distinguish who is the person in
greatest
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 need and it is local charities' responsibility to deal with domestic
problems
. There are
also
 many deprived areas in each country, and a large number of residents live in poverty even in developed countries. Taking China as an example, a great number of
children
 are left at home with their grandparents because their parents have to immigrate to big cities to find jobs. These
children
 not only lack economic support, but
also
 interactions with family members. Perhaps these
problems
 are not as emergency as hunger, but it is
also
 imperative and would affect
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 generation's growth. From
this
 perspective, I believe that
charity
 funds should be allocated to support domestic inhabitants. In conclusion, while international aid is necessary, I agree that it is more important to focus on domestic
problems
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charity organizations
  • aid
  • greatest need
  • equality
  • fair distribution
  • resources
  • universal value
  • compassion
  • humanitarianism
  • global stability
  • economic growth
  • local needs
  • national unity
  • quality of life
  • social cohesion
  • inequality
  • domestic communities
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