Some people feel that entertainers (film stars, sport stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs that should be highly paid?

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starts and celebrities get pretty high
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? The answer has always been relative. Some people think that they are getting more than they deserve, while others believe that they are getting fair
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for their job. The following paragraphs will explain why I totally agree that they should get much
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and will mention other types of
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that should secure higher
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. Movie and sports stars are usually working almost all
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day, and have no time to do other types of
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. That's why they should be paid high
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great value, since they are participating in people's pleasure and the main core of their
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is to make their audiences have fun.
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great
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must be appreciated by
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amount of
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, football players are spending 90% of their time training hard to be fit and help their fans to have fun, so that their wages must be good enough to have a good life since they can't have other
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. There are many professions that should be paid a lot of
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.
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, doctors are extremely valuable for their societies. They are not only treating
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sick patients
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they protect the people from getting ill by discovering new medicines to fight infections. So that it is fair enough to get the highest possible
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, the production of new vaccines requires years from
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hard
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by doctors who should be paid
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a lot
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,
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the great
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messengers
who helped us to be useful members
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our countries. Their wages should be revised and raised to thank them for their fantastic role. According to a survey done in France for the list of
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that are unfairly paid, teaching was one of the top five
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on the list. In conclusion, despite the fact that celebrities are getting high
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, in my
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they totally deserve it, as these
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can't be combined with others so they should secure good
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, I believe that other
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like doctors and teachers should be paid more and more
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