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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. " What are your opinions on this?

#supermarkets #food #country #imports
The graph depicts the change in the
gap
 between the amount of energy
production
 and
consumption
 in the US from 1950 to 2000. It
also
 provides the estimation for the trend up to 2025. Starting at the same point, nearly 25
units
, in 1950, both
production
 and
consumption
 increased continuously to just over 65
units
 in the
first
 25 years.
Although
consumption
 was always higher than
production
 during
this
 period, the difference was negligible.
However
, the
gap
 between the two figures was extended during the
next
 25 years, so the US needed to import energy to bridge
this
gap
. To be more precise, while
production
 went up gradually to reach 75
units
 in 2000, growth in
consumption
 was more rapid, reaching 95
units
 in 2000. Strikingly, only in the mid-period did both
consumption
 and
production
 witnessed fluctuations in their figures strongly. As far as the predictions are concerned,
this
 trend is likely to continue up to 2025 with the
gap
 between
production
 and
consumption
 widening. By 2025, it is expected that
consumption
 will reach 140
units
, whereas the US will be able to produce only 90
units
. So, more energy has to be imported to give to consumers. To sum up, the US
production
 is not keeping up with US
consumption
 so that the imports will continue to need in the
next
 25 years.
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