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some people feel that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the country side. discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #city #life #country #side
The conflict of opinions about where the place is better to live in will never end or people agreeing on the same opinion. Because there is no model answer.The decision basically depends on the ones who will live their needs, their lifestyle and financial possibilities. All these factors will lead them to choose which be better for them the town
life
 or rural area. From the point of view of the cities' supporters, everything they need is nearby them. In urban
places
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 there are a lot of companies and many organizations which result in creating a huge amount of work opportunities get worthy salaries that can cover expenditures of a decent
life
.
Moreover
,shopping malls,restaurants and cafes played a big role in attracting people to the city, Because
this
 gives them a lot of choices to get outside from their homes
On the contrary
, rural
life
 is the real meaning of living at the heart of nature. The countryside has fresh air, a lot of landscapes with beautiful sceneries, mountains, and waterfalls. All of these features make the countryside a peaceful place to live in. The quite environment affects
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mental health positively and makes people have high performance at work and daily
life
.
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, in the countryside is always organic and newly harvested.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolitan
  • amenities
  • congestion
  • rural
  • serenity
  • sustainable living
  • commute
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • tranquility
  • pros and cons
  • lifestyle
  • work-life balance
  • wellbeing
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