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Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with? How do you think space exploration will change in the future? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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exploration
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 has become
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 should be held by its own country because it will bring worldwide fame and pride to the country.
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, some people believe that teamwork with a variety of
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 will promote to achieve
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the admirable
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 result in
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exploration
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 of all, there is a significant growth in
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exploration
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 because of international effort and educational background.
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, it is known that there are a variety of international
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 programs that made
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contribute
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 to
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 travelling outer
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.
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, the International
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 Station is a mutual project between five different agencies of NASA
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 company.
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, global task-sharing facilitate peaceful diplomatic relations between
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 which participate in
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 development and research what in turn made it able to keep
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 bond among them.
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, developed
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such
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 as the United States, Japan, China, Russia provide each other technical sources and funds to help to achieve a goal in
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 tremendous sphere. To sum up, if
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 will try to discover
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 every corner of
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the galaxy
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 in order to travel, human beings can demonstrate a compelling implication in
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 unknown
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.
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, worldwide collaboration amongst
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plenty of
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 have an interest and opportunity to rise a level of
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exploration
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 undoubtedly leads to a new era of
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 travelling.
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