Some people think students in primary school / secondary school should be taught how to manage money because it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree?

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One
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of the most important
skills
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we all need to learn is how to spend our
money
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. According to some critics,
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skill should be taught earlier in life, during
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years. I strongly support
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essay,I will examine my reasoning in details. Needless to say that budgeting is
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of the most important
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we all need to know.
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skills
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in our day-
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life.Most of us
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, put aside
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we need for our rent, food, and utility bills aside before spending the rest on clothing or shopping
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essential items. If we can not manage our
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, we will end up spending on unessential items
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of our
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learning
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is paramount in
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It can not be argued that the best time for learning new
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is at
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because
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has more capacity to learn at
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age.
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, when
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skill is taught at
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, it can be used right at
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age.
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of
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and education. By putting
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management in
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subject, we can kill two birds with
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stone. By
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teaching about careers, we can
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implement coaching about spending
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skills
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and would not struggle in the future. It is my believe that budgeting is a skill that everyone would benefit from it.If we can implement it into the
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curriculum, all the students would be able to master it at
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age and be able to prioritize their needs in term of finance in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial literacy
  • informed decisions
  • financial responsibility
  • budgeting
  • saving
  • financial difficulties
  • independence
  • controlled environment
  • consequences
  • opponents
  • real-world consequences
  • foundation for financial responsibility
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