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Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary era, both mother and father are earning and they need to rely on someone else to take
care
 of their
children
. While some people think that
childcare
 organizations can offer the best
care
, I would argue that it is better for
children
 to be
be
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looked after
their
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grandparents
. On the one hand, some people consider that the kids should be sent to
childcare
 for
few
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 reasons.
Firstly
, since the
childcare
 employees are professionals, they can handle the responsibility of
children
 and their needs. They not only have good skills but
also
 have good experience of
this
.
Secondly
, there are other kids enrolled due to which one cannot feel lonely and will always be happy as he will be playing with many
children
 of his age.
For example
, my son used to eagerly wait to go to
childcare
 as he liked to play with his friends there.
On the other hand
, others opine that it is
better
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 idea for
a
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grandparents
 to take
care
 of their grandchildren. One of the reason is he or she is part of their family, which creates
a
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 emotional and unconditional bond that cannot be compromised in any way. They will be ready to sacrifice their own valuable things for their grandchildren, which cannot be expected from a
childcare
center
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.
Furthermore
, they tend to spend more time with kids as compared to
childcare
 which helps
children
 grow within the family itself. It is believed that
children
 raised by their
grandparents
 grow faster when compared to others. In conclusion, while there are some benefits of sending
children
 to child
care
centers
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, I believe that
grandparents
 can take
care
 of them in a better way because of the fact that they are family members.
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