Many working people get little or no exercise during the working day or in their free time, and hand health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Nowadays, many workers not getting enough
exercise
on their
deaily
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daily
bases which cose them various
helath
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health
problems.
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essay will discuss why employee usually
skip
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exercies
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exercises
exercise
in their life and provide a solution. Many workers are suffering
different
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the different
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type of health issues
beacuse
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because
they are not doing enough
exercise
.
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Even
though most of the big firms have a
sport
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facility, employees not
useing
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using
it. There is
many
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reason
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reasons
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why employee not getting enough
exercise
such
as they are exhausted the end of the day, they have other social
activityes
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activities
to do or they are just lazy to do something. Companies and workers have to change to provide a solution
for
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this
problem. More employer
have
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to provide
sport
activity programs to their staff and give them a voucher to the local
sport
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gym. Employee
have
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to change their
mindeset
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mindset
mind-set
to live
a
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apply
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healthier life and give a good example to the
next
generation.
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, people have to stop making excuses and start doing some
sport
or
exercise
which provide
them
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a better health condition.
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