Many people live in towns and cities where there are museums that promote historical and artistic objects of cultural importance, but they don't visit them. Why do you think many people don't visit museums? What is the cultural importance of museums to society?

These days most of the denizens live in town and cities where there is an art gallery that promotes the historical and artistic object of cultural importance but they do not
visit
them. There are several reasons and I elucidate my viewpoints in my upcoming paragraphs
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why netizens do not
visit
the
museum
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foremost reason is that in the modern ,era
people
do not have time to
visit
there because of a busy schedule .
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their own work and jobs.
Secondly
,
this
art gallery has entry fees . Poor
people
can not afford entry fees
that is
why they do not
visit
there.
However
, these
museum
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are very important for
people
because
people
learn about our culture and history through
these art gallery
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.
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of knowledge from
museum
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.
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denizens should take their children to
these
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museum
. In modern era children do not know about their tradition and culture, they should go there and learn our tradition . It is very important and when
people
go there they feel relax and
stress free
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. To recapitulate , the
museum
plays an important role but theses days denizens do not have time to
visit
there . According to my perspective, they should
visit
there and
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a lot of knowledge regarding their culture.
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