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Many people live in towns and cities where there are museums that promote historical and artistic objects of cultural importance, but they don't visit them. Why do you think many people don't visit museums? What is the cultural importance of museums to society?

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These days most of the denizens live in town and cities where there is an art gallery that promotes the historical and artistic object of cultural importance but they do not
visit
 them. There are several reasons and I elucidate my viewpoints in my upcoming paragraphs
To begin
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why netizens do not
visit
 the
museum
. The
first
 and
the
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foremost reason is that in the modern ,era
people
 do not have time to
visit
 there because of a busy schedule .
People
 are busy
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 their own work and jobs.
Secondly
,
this
 art gallery has entry fees . Poor
people
 can not afford entry fees
that is
 why they do not
visit
 there.
However
, these
museum
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 are very important for
people
 because
people
 learn about our culture and history through
these art gallery
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.
People
 grabe
lot
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 of knowledge from
museum
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the museum
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.
Moreover
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 denizens should take their children to
these
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this museum
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museum
. In modern era children do not know about their tradition and culture, they should go there and learn our tradition . It is very important and when
people
 go there they feel relax and
stress free
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. To recapitulate , the
museum
 plays an important role but theses days denizens do not have time to
visit
 there . According to my perspective, they should
visit
 there and
grabe
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grab
 a lot of knowledge regarding their culture.
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