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any people live in towns and cities where there are museums that promote historical and artistic objects of cultural importance, but they don't visit them. Why do you think many people don't visit museums? What is the cultural importance of museums to society?

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 one of the objects to promote the historical and artistic cultural it is important for
historical cultural
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however
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 it is calm culture to in
museums
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 while I would like to delve
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 before forming an opinion.
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people
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's don't live in
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 situated places because
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's feel bored and tired
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 individuals like fun entertainment but
museums
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 sides are
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 and peaceful places.
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people
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 like picnic and hunting for animals .
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Further more
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museums
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 important for new generations
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is pass
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 our tradition and culture on to
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next
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 generation.
Museums
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 explain all past construction how can
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 during the previous dynasties . In
conclusion
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people
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are get
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more information about culture, history and science through
internet
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 so
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reason
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people
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are not visit
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museums
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