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According to a recent study, the more time people use the Internet, the less time they spend with real human beings. Some people say that instead of seeing the Internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities world- wide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interaction. How far do you agree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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 plays a significant role in every human being life. It is mostly caused by the fact, that making a personal arrangement in the post office or other places became stymied.
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, credit cards are replacing cash, online shopping has become frequently used by people and many of the formal matters are required to solve through the
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,it has started to be an inseparable part of ones' lives with a large impact on one behave. I agree that it has negative effects on social interaction. It is common knowledge, that
internet
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 has made peoples' existence easier up to the present time. They are able to work through the computer, use an automatic cash register without standing in the line or study at home.
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, it has a negative impact on the amount of personal interaction with other people. As can be seen by now, the younger generation is becoming shyer and closed on society, which is caused by
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 of necessity to get in touch with each other.
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, the amount of time spent interacting with friends throughout the
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personal and physical contact. On the positive side of it is the fact that one can meet people from all around the world or keep in touch with close relatives living abroad.
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, it is important to remember that it influences the time given to others around. Focusing on online friendships might cause losing the real ones. Given these points, we can observe that
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

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 is a part of us that will probably never disappear,
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 it is significant to separate private life from
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 one. Hanging out with friends, going to school and work, seeing and talking to others personally, will be always better than living through the screen.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital era
  • Social isolation
  • Cyberspace
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Face-to-face communication
  • Global village
  • Virtual reality
  • Remote connections
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Digital divide
  • Cyber-socialization
  • Screen time
  • Online networking
  • Physical disconnection
  • Social dynamics
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