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Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with? How do you think space exploration will change in the future? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Day after day, space exploration is becoming an actual topic and it is more seems like the development of private business of individual countries rather than international interests.
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, some people agree that
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 encouraged international communities which can lead to the advancement of space exploration technologies in the future. The most important reason for the development of the rocket industry in individual countries is
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 between world leaders.
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, after
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 World War, USSR and
USA
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the USA
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 had begun the “Cold War”, the reason for that: to introduce the power. In 1969 Neil Armstrong became the
first
 man to be on the moon.
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,
USA
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 earns huge respect in world politics and as we know they become the most powerful country.
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 countries pride, there are so many global problems that humanity faces
everyday
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 which have to be solved. As
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 known, in the
last
 decade, the number of Earth population had increased causing over-
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exhausting
. Earth can support human life no longer and it is
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international
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the international
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 community to work together. Exploring Mars can be the
last
 chance
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 humanity in order to survive, so international collaboration
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 together to make Mars a new Earth. Unfortunately,
this
 needs a huge amount of funding so if a nation worries only about
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 pride, the project will fail. To sum up, I would say that international effort is the main moving force of space exploration that could help to deal with several
human kind
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humankind
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 problems. Even a small portion of national pride should be avoided in order to be survived.
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