Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Some
people
believe that the most effective
solution
for decreasing
traffic
and
pollution
issues is to increase the price of petrol.
However
, in my opinion,
this
notion will be beneficial to some extent but
this
is not a permanent
solution
. The following essay will give a detail explanation about other measures that might be effective.
To begin
with , due to an increase in
fuel
prices there will be a reduction in the usage of private transport and
people
will travel in public vehicles and
this
will reduce the
traffic
and will
also
solve all the
problems
related to
pollution
as
this
solution
will decrease the emissions of carbon dioxide from the vehicles.
On the other hand
,
this
solution
also
has some disadvantages. To illustrate , the increase in petrol prices will not create any problem
to
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the affluent because they can spend a lot of money on
fuel
in order to travel in a private vehicle
such
as a car.
Instead
of
this
, there should be an improvement in the construction of fast roads because
this
will solve the
problems
related to
traffic
,
additionally
, there should be an improvement in
the
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public transportation.
For example
, if the government contributes
in
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the construction of fast trains ,
this
will reduce the
traffic
as
people
will prefer to travel in trains over cars and
also
, they will save their time.
Moreover
, money should be spent on the creation of
the
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transportation that consumes less amount
of
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petrol and emits limited carbon dioxide and due to
this
, air
pollution
will be under control.
For example
, there should be more focus on the production of electric bikes because it saves
fuel
. To conclude , higher
fuel
prices
is
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not a permanent
solution
for these
problems
and due to
this
fact,
people
should focus on alternative solutions that might prove useful in solving
problems
related to
traffic
and
pollution
.
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