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In many countries, people now wear western clothes (suits, jeans) rather than the traditional clothing. Why? (Reasons and relevant examples) Is this a positive or negative development?

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More often
people
 from different countries choose western
clothes
instead
 of traditional
clothes
. There is no consensus in society is it
positive
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 or negative
development
. Some of them say that
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individual comfort is the most important thing , but
on the
contrary
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 community loses national identity. Honestly, I like
suits
 and another American classic fashion culture but In my
opinion
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 it is a bad trend. So I will try to prove
you
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 that with examples of
Ukraine
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the Ukraine
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 Culture Centre report and professor Jan Danilov's research. The
first
 reason why wear western
clothes
 is a negative
development
 is
because
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that
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 citizens in different countries and regions losing their traditional clothing identity.
For example
, in Ukraine Culture Centre report said that
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only 4
percent
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per cent
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 of Ukrainians wear national
clothes
.
For
instance
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 5 years ago it was 9
percent
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per cent
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. So
this
 is why wearing
suits
, jeans rather than
the
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traditional clothing is a negative
development
. The
second
 example
why
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 it is a bad trend proved by professor Jan Danilov. In his
research
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 he studied how common western
clothes
affects
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affect
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people
's psychology. As
the
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 result of his
study
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 Danilov found the connection between wearing the same
clothes
, like
suits
 and jeans, and depression. So
this
 is another reason why
this
 tendency
have
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has
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 a negative impact
for
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on
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people
. In
conclusion
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 I think it is a negative
development
 when
people
 wear western
clothes
 rather than
the
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traditional clothing. In my
opinion
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 it is a bad trend and society should choose national
clothes
instead
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ofinstead
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 jeans and
suits
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Influence
  • Perception
  • Modern
  • Trendy
  • Practicality
  • Comfort
  • Professionalism
  • Integration
  • Global economy
  • Cultural identity
  • Appreciation
  • Preservation
  • Individual expression
  • Freedom of choice
  • Positive
  • Negative
  • Impacts
  • Local industries
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