Some people believe that Bangkok Metropolitan Administration should invest in the expansion of the underground railway system instead of roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

Many
people
suggest that
Bangkok
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city
Administration should subsidize
in
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the
expansion
of the underground
railways
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system rather than roads. It is a tendency to believe that using individual cars is
the
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convenience
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ways to travel in
Bangkok
.
However
,
Bangkok
is the most bustling
city
in Thailand and the top rank of
traffic
problems
city
in the world. According to
this
point of view,
Bangkok
city
is the most popular destination for
people
to work and travel. It is
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density of
city
- dwellers as well as
the
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traffic
problems.
For example
,
people
who live in
Bangkok
need to wake up early in the morning and leave home before 6 o’clock to travel to their
work place
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because
the
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traffic
jams
are always happened
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in the morning.
However
, there are various types of transportations in
Bangkok
such
as BTS, MRT, taxi and private cars. It cannot
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that private cars
is
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the most famous transportation. There are not enough routes in BTS or MRT reach in every destination in the
city
and
this
is the main problem of
the
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public transport in
Bangkok
.
Therefore
, the government or the
Bangkok
Metropolitan Administration should invest in the
expansion
of the underground railway system
such
as MRT. 
However
, there is the main
struckling
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struggling
trucking
in
this
idea
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nowadays.
Bangkok
at the present time is
in
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the
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instability ground point because of rising
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ocean levels.
For instance
, flooding
is happened
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in every rainy
seasons
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and it
make
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the ground
loosing
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their intensity; thereby the grounds are unsteadily and not enough to do any heavy infrastructures. According to
this
problem, the government should concern about the quality of the infrastructure of the underground railway stations in the future to make the sustainable
city
rather than
expansion
only the roads. In conclusion, I believed that the government should invest in the
expansion
of
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public transportation, particularly in the underground railway system.
Expansion
of roads can increase the
traffic
density and it will affect the
people
in the
city
. Subsidizing and funding
on
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the
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sustainable infrastructure might be difficult and cost an enormous investment but it is the best way for the
city
in the future.
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