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Some people believe that Bangkok Metropolitan Administration should invest in the expansion of the underground railway system instead of roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

Many
people
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 suggest that
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Bangkok
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the Bangkok
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city
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 Administration should subsidize
in
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the
expansion
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 of the underground
railways
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railway's
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 system rather than roads. It is a tendency to believe that using individual cars is
the
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a
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convenience
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 ways to travel in
Bangkok
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.
However
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,
Bangkok
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 is the most bustling
city
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 in Thailand and the top rank of
traffic
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 problems
city
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 in the world. According to
this
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 point of view,
Bangkok
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city
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 is the most popular destination for
people
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 to work and travel. It is
high
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a high
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 density of
city
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- dwellers as well as
the
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traffic
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 problems.
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,
people
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 who live in
Bangkok
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 need to wake up early in the morning and leave home before 6 o’clock to travel to their
work place
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workplace
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 because
the
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traffic
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 jams
are always happened
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 in the morning.
However
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, there are various types of transportations in
Bangkok
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such
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 as BTS, MRT, taxi and private cars. It cannot
denied
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 that private cars
is
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 the most famous transportation. There are not enough routes in BTS or MRT reach in every destination in the
city
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 and
this
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 is the main problem of
the
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public transport in
Bangkok
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.
Therefore
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, the government or the
Bangkok
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 Metropolitan Administration should invest in the
expansion
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 of the underground railway system
such
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 as MRT. 
However
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, there is the main
struckling
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struggling
trucking
 in
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 idea
happens
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 nowadays.
Bangkok
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 at the present time is
in
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the
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an
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 instability ground point because of rising
in
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ocean levels.
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, flooding
is happened
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happens
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 in every rainy
seasons
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season
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 and it
make
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 the ground
loosing
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 their intensity; thereby the grounds are unsteadily and not enough to do any heavy infrastructures. According to
this
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 problem, the government should concern about the quality of the infrastructure of the underground railway stations in the future to make the sustainable
city
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 rather than
expansion
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 only the roads. In conclusion, I believed that the government should invest in the
expansion
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 of
the
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public transportation, particularly in the underground railway system.
Expansion
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 of roads can increase the
traffic
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 density and it will affect the
people
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 in the
city
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. Subsidizing and funding
on
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the
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sustainable infrastructure might be difficult and cost an enormous investment but it is the best way for the
city
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 in the future.

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