Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with? How do you think space exploration will change in the future? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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21st
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century our technologies have evolved so much that allows humanity to dive 11,000 meters deep and travel through
space
. Nowadays,
Space
exploration
takes the lead in development but someone
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that
this
become into
competition
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between
countries
and in these latter days it becomes more national
pride
than international effort. In our generation,
countries
worry about their
pride
and strength more than possible results from cooperation. A superpower country is trying to show
his
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power to other
countries
,
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because they will receive more respect and benefit from it.
Moreover
, they try to show the world that they have a superior
technology
that allows them to become the leading country, but in case if
countries
cooperate, humanity will reach
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and even stars, because collaborations help to simplify the work.
For example
, China and North America became partners in terms of
space
explorations leaving all
pride
and distrust behind. With the Chinese advanced
technology
and the United States significant experience they achieved high results. So it is only a matter of
time
before international collaboration in
space
exploration
becomes a reality. The
first
exploration
rocket launched in
1961
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year and above I said that in our
time
technologies are so developed that they allow humans to travel even in
space
. It’s clear that after 60 years’ way of
exploration
and researches will change totally. In fact, people use robots and
technology
to explore
space
more than fly themselves.
Furthermore
, in
this
adventure people use rovers and one of them called Spirit that explore Mars in
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time
. So it is possible that individuals and billionaires will personally explore
space
in the future. In conclusion, if
countries
and people from
whole
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world will step over their
pride
to achieve a higher goal, they will rich everything no matter to complexity. Some
countries
have their own strong sides like China with
technology
development so only
time
will tell how everything will change.
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