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Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

#education #luxury #right #wealth
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 rate is increasing in the world making
education
 the
back bone
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 for social and personal development. According to some people,
education
 should be free of charge for everyone regardless of their income status. I partially agree with
this
 idea, thinking only primary
education
 should be a basic human right and the responsibility of
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government
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 because it puts
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 into a huge financial burden and
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 individuals who have enough money should be held accountable.
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the literacy
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 rate is
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 the rise in almost all countries, taking
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 part of
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 return into paying for
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the education
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 sector. According to
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recent statistics, around
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third
 of every
governments
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 budget goes to primary
education
. In fact, teachers salary, school maintenance, sports and all other expenses are paid by
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 making it free in most countries. In some countries where governments are involved in other issues like war or political upheavals, it
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 sense for other governments to help to make sure
education
 is provided for all at least until grade 12. Th
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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