Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children. Others think parents needn’t do that as children can read books or watch TV, movies by themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There has been an on-going debate in the
last
few years about whether
parents
are supposed to read
stories
for
children
. Some people argue that the involvement of
parents
in story-reading is necessary while the rest believe that
children
benefit more from forming their own reading habits. From my perspective, it is more beneficial for
children
to gather information independently. Without doubts,
parents
play a significant role in
early
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development of
children
. Generally speaking, story-telling empowers
children
to become curious. By listening to fairy tales from
parents
,
children
can learn about nature and history. They would
also
generate various questions about
society
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they are living in from these tales, which
consequently
develops their creativity. Another point worth mentioning is that it takes time and efforts for
children
to be mature enough to read
story books
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or to understand the contents from TV shows on their own and
thus
supports from family at an early stage appear to be more important. Despite the difficulty for
children
to acquire information from books and TVs directly at an early age, it is still indispensable to develop the learning skills
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them.
First
of all, reading independently is the best opportunity to form a reading habit for
children
, and their reading and writing skills can be trained during their independent reading.
By contrast
, only listening to
stories
could ultimately lead to
the
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over-reliance on
parents
and is detrimental to their future study in school.
In addition
, the
stories
from
parents
are prone to be limited to their own knowledge, while tremendous helpful and fresh information,
such
as
stories
that can trigger
children
’s interests in math, can be found in books, which contributes to a more balanced development for them. To put everything into consideration
,
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supports from
parents
in story-telling promote creativity and curiosity for youngsters.
However
, not only does independent reading contributes to the writing and reading skills
for
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children
, but
also
it enables
children
to get access to a wider range of
knowledges
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, which leads to
a
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more balanced development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bonding
  • cognitive development
  • multisensory learning
  • narratives
  • foster
  • empathy
  • vicarious experiences
  • storytelling
  • screen time
  • interpretation
  • media literacy
  • language acquisition
  • innate curiosity
  • scaffolding
  • imaginative play
  • literary appreciation
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