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Many jobs that used to be done by humans are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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Nowadays, progress in the world goes faster and faster day by day.
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, jobs that have been done by humans, are done by robots and machines presently. From my point of view,
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 tendency has much more advantages than disadvantages.
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, it saves
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 for people to do more important
work
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,
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 as creating new technologies and doing researches.
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, workers now have more
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 to spend it with their families and friends.
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 with, high technologies are essential in our modern life. Scientists have a lot of
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 to bring new inventions to the world, while machines do
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 monotonous job.
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, there were 20% more innovations introduced in the past 3 years.
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 research,
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 was published in the BBC in March 2020, proves, that mechanization has a lot of positive sides.
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, people who used to
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 hard in factories are now doing
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simpler
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,
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 as, adjusting
machine’s
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work
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 and so on. In
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 day, so they can spend their free
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 more productive and interesting.
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, go for a walk with
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 or play some games with kids.
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 why technologies are useful. To sum up, all
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this
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society even more inventions and give more
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 for relaxation. I guess, it will be no
work
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, that must be done by humans in 5 years.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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