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It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a hot issue about whether all
towns
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 and
cities
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 should have large public outdoor places like squares and parks. I disagree with that opinion, in my perspective, I assume that not all
towns
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 and
cities
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 need it. A large public outdoor place contributes to citizens have fun there and offers them opportunities to involve diversity activities like amusement competitions. Having a spacious public outdoor
area
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 not only cost a huge amount of taxpayers money but
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 need to use a huge public space source which ought to have better usage than squares or parks.
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, in some developing
cities
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,they can not afford the expend of building large public amusement park which is a waste of government’s fund that could be poured
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 education or the local economy so that could change local society
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 of a park.
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, the public
area
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 can not be fully used due to the less population, even if there is a large public in some tiny
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.It turns out
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 a waste of money as well.
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, things will completely different in metropolitans, because a large number of populations have more need for amusement. So, there is no need for small
towns
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 and tiny
cities
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 to have a large public
area
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, especially for those developing
cities
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 and those that have less population. In summary, metropolitans could afford the expend of building a large public
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instead
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 of tiny and underdeveloped
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,
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 less population
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 will result in a waste of money due to the low-frequency usage.So,
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 not paramount for all
towns
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 and
cities
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 to have large public outdoor places

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public outdoor spaces
  • community events
  • social cohesion
  • community engagement
  • quality of urban life
  • physical activities
  • public health and wellbeing
  • environmental benefits
  • reduce pollution
  • urban wildlife
  • aesthetic appeal
  • inclusive access
  • economic benefits
  • local businesses
  • tourists attractions
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