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Some people think that watching imported films or TV programmes is good way to broaden a country's culture. Others feel that it is better to let a country make its own films

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With the rapid development of globalisation, it is much more common for
citizens
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 to admire
films
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 from abroad. With that said, some
people
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 believe that watching
films
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 from their own
country
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 is better than watch imported
films
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. From my perspective, I think it is better to watch
films
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 from different countries as it is easier for
people
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 to absorb different cultures.
Undoubtably
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Undoubtedly
, natives can always comprehend the
culture
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 from their own
country
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 easier. The main reason for
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citizens
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 have
absorb
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knowledge
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the knowledge
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 of tradition from domestic media since they were children.
Culture
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 and
citizens
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 supplement each other. If
people
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 watch
films
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 from their own
country
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 more, they have
better
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a better
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 feeling about their own
country
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 absolutely. What is more, it will
also
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 lead to a significant impact on the domestic film market. With the increase of the revenue of local film-companies, film producers have more cash to invest
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 their
films
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citizens
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, which will
rise
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raise
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 the quality of
films
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,
then
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 the audience will have stronger confidence about their own box office, which will upgrade the confidence of film directors, improving the quality of movies again
as a result
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, which is a virtuous circle.
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,
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some
people
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, they believe that admiring imported
films
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 is a good way to broaden a
country
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’s
culture
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. In my opinion, I think global horizons are important for contemporary
people
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, which can be cultivated by admiring overseas movies. If
people
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 usually watch imported TV programmes usually, they will know more about local conditions and customs from different places, which expands their depth of thought.
In addition
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,
people
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 can know their own
culture
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 deeper from another perspective. Take ‘The
Last
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 Emperor’ as an example, which is directed by Bernardo Bertolucci. It showed the Chinese
culture
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 well and
also
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 had a strong international influence.
Although
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 it is directed by a foreigner, it is still educational for Chinese
people
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, which can enable
people
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understand
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 the history of that period easily. Today, in my view, I think it is necessary for the young to have global horizons as globalisation is developing rapidly, which means
people
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 need to watch imported
films
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, meanwhile, it is
also
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 instrumental to get a better understanding of native
culture
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. In conclusion,
although
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people
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’s opinions differ
about
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films
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, it is
undoubtable
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undoubtedly
 that they both benefit
people
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. The meaning and the content of
films
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 are the main factors to select them.
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