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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What   do you think are the causes of this? • What solutions can you suggest?

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Watching
T
.
V
 and reading the newspaper is not popular among youngsters in many nations.
This
 essay will suggest that the main cause of
this
 situation is that young
people
 prefer to use social
media
 and they do not have enough
time
 for watching
t
.
v
 and the most viable solution is that
channels
 have to reduce the
ads
 they run between
programs
. Social
media
 is the primary reason that adolescents do not prefer to spend their
time
 watching tv or reading newspapers.
This
 is to say that it is more convenient to use social
media
 because everyone has their own device in their pocket.
In addition
 to that,
people
 do not have much
time
 to sit before the
T
.
V
 and watch 20min program in an hour or reading the newspapers.
Channels
 run too many adverts between
programs
 that waste a lot of
time
, so they watch their favourite
programs
 on websites.
As a result
, the popularity of
T
.
V
 and newspapers have decreased since the inception of social
media
 websites.
For example
, many dramas and shows are uploaded, just after running on
T
.
V
, on websites
such
 as Youtube.com or Dailymotion.com without any advertisement. The long term solution to
this
 situation is that television
channels
 have to reduce the advertisements.
This
 is because by running too many adverts between
programs
channels
 will not be able to get the attention of the public.
For instance
, Skysports is a sports channel that used to put a plethora of
ads
 between a Cricket match's overs and their rating got dropped, after that they took the initiative to run fewer
ads
 and their rating went up again. Young
people
 do not like to read a newspaper or watching
T
.
V
 in many countries. The main reason is that
people
 do not like to waste their times on
ads
 and they have the alternative in the shape of social
media
 which is easier to access, the most viable solutions is that
T
.
V
channels
 have to think about reducing the adverts between
programs
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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