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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to students' sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. To what extent do you agree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you have to support your answer.

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These days,
sports
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 activities have a role in the
students
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' life compared with the
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 century. Because of that many colleges spend a lot of money to develop their
sports
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'
facilities
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 as they spend on libraries' equipment. In my opinion, they should do that and I agree with
this
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 view. I will discuss that view in the essay below. On the one hand, the importance of practising
sports
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 during the university years appeared on the
students
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' behaviour. For
this
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 reason, many
universities
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 prefer to spend their money to develop
sports
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'
facilities
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. In the United Kingdom,
for example
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, despite famous
universities
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 focus in their advertisements on the high quality of their
sports
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'
facilities
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 in camps higher than libraries, they still ranked the top
universities
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 in the world.
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,
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 clear the quality of learning depends on the healthy life of
students
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.
On the other hand
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, there are some people who think that education must focus on heavy subjects and the high number of books in the
universities
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' library. I completely disagree with
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 view for many reasons.
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, many research papers discussed that if education depends only on the quantity of papers
students
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 read, they will not achieve the profession they hope for.
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, many developing countries still depend on these methods of learning and their rank lower than others.
Secondly
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, that stress gain of
this
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 traditional way impact on the
students
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 level.
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, the merits of developing
sports
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facilities
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 encourage
universities
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 to spend their money on that. In conclusion,
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 clear the
universities
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 focus on developing their
sports
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'
facilities
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such
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 as tennis court, football court and Gym as they develop their libraries. I am of the belief that the right behaviour they should do.

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