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EDUCATION IS NOT LUXURY, BUT A BASIC HUMAN RIGHT AND AS SUCH SHOULD BE FREE FOR EVERYONE IRRESPECTIVE OF PERSONAL WEALTH. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#education #luxury #right #wealth
School is not a luxury, but it is a fundamental human right and should be provided to all without any cost
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schooling should be made free.
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, it provides essential knowledge to the children and
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, it helps them to receive a qualification that will eventually help them to get a job in the future.
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 institution is the place where the pupils are taught the ideas and skills needed in their life.
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 the kids to perceive the world around them and understand the essential aspects of
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life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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