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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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To agree or disagree with the above
statement
 that, as a
punishment
, criminal should send behind the bars or should send for unpaid community work is an important issue.Putting the discussion in a wider context,
punishment
 should be focused on the betterment of criminals. Even though some folks from our
society
 support that they should be kept behind the bars , according to my point of view, I wholeheartedly believe, unpaid community work for prisoners as
punishment
 is a better choice. In the essay, I will discuss some arguments to support my point. On the one hand, many people agree with
this
statement
 for many noteworthy reasons.The most remarkable is, some prisoners are not harmful to
society
.
For instance
, some people commit a crime because of their needs
such
 as stealing food or a small amount of money and they are not hurting any person,
hence
 unpaid community work will help to become a hardworking person.
Moreover
, they will become a good and responsible person in
society
.
on the other hand
, some people disagree with the
statement
. The most important reason is, they don't feel safe if these criminals are not in jail. As an example, in a few cases, it has been seen that, after completing
punishment
, criminal again try to commit the crime as they get to know that about the
punishment
. To put it in a nuts shell, I pen down saying that, before giving any
statement
, the judge should consider the severity of the crime and its effect on
society
. As well as,
punishment
 should focus on the betterment of prisoners.
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