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The best way to solve environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#price #fuel
it is a debatable topic that
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rise
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 the
cost
 of fossil
fuel
 may protect the
enviornment
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environment
 from
the
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pollution.
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 essay will discuss how
people
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the
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glabal
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global
 warming to protect our ecosystem on the one hand in
this
 modern
world
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 the number of
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the vehicle
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vehicle
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are
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 drastically increasing and the emission of carbon dioxide is higher comparing with the past days.
This
emmited
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emitted
 carbon dioxide would accumulate in the atmosphere eventually it may lead to several health issues as well as it will
adversly
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adversely
effect
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 the climate.For
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instance
instace
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 the biggest typhoon happened in
United
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states
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 of America due to global warming.The consumption of fossil
fuel
 is
inreasing
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increasing
 dramatically
although
 the price is high in some region.India has
high
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cost
 for
the
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fuel
however
 still
people
 are buying new vehicles day by day,
moreover
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 the industries and factories are producing
high
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 amount of pollution.
on the other hand
,in my
opinion
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people
 should start to
use
 the
electrical
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 vehicle to drive.It will never pollute the
enviornment
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environment
.Not only that the
cost
 will be less
comparing
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 to
the
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fossil fuels.
Also
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 other kind
energies
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 should
use
 for the
indstries
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industries
 it may provide the best future for our new generation.
Aeging
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Ageing
 and cancerous diseases are uncountable in the present world.To control the sickness the government should take the
intiative
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initiative
,either the number of vehicles should decrease or the best
alterantive
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alternative
 have to
be introduce
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 to the world.Developed and educated countries like Norway and Finland
they
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use
thier
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their
 bicycles to go to
thier
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their
work place
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.I think
people
 should be
educated
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oneducated
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 the seriousness behind the
use
 of fuels. To conclude I completely disagree
for
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 the statement
of
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 increasing the
cost
 of
fuel
.It will help only the countries with
fuel
 production and gradually the consumer
countires
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countries
 will get underdeveloped.The best way
people
 should
use
 their bicycles for
the
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travelling despite long
disctance
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distance
distances
.
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