Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are people
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the same careers for the whole life, while others think that working in
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organization will make more benefits. It is a tendency to believe that working in the same workplace can prove the loyalty of the employees and it might easy to get promoted.
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, I believed that changing the organization for work can challenge our improvement as well. No one can deny the fact that most
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organizations need
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loyalty
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their workers. There are many work systems that promote
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higher positions to their employees based on their working period in that company.
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sport
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organizations
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as football or rugby mostly promote the oldest athlete to be the captain of the team because he might have more experiences that the younger one.
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, working in various organizations can make benefits for
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individual improvements.
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, moving
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careers to work in many companies can improve the skills of collaborations and communications.
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, their might increase the experiences and visions in works unlikely to repeat the same works all the time. In conclusion, there are several benefits and drawbacks between working in
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jobs all their life and working in different jobs.
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, working in certain careers should concern
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individual preferences and
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environment in that workplaces. In my opinion, I do not hesitate
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to restrict
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only one career. I love to find
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jobs that will suit my personal lifestyle.
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