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Dear Madam, Good Morning! Thank
for
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 giving me
golden
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 opportunity to introduce myself before you. My name is Naziya. I am an innovative, enthusiastic and very positive
Teacher
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 with 5
years
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experience
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 managing all
aspect
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aspects
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 of
students
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student
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 mentoring functions from training, observing, educating, handling stress, taking care, being friendly and fair to all, getting
job
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 done at
satisfactory
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 level and always go
extra
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 mile to achieve goals. I have spent
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last
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 6
years
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 developing my skills as a
teacher
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, where I have won performance awards and been mentioned for good work. I love and enjoy teaching. I am a person who thrives in a fast-paced environment so right now I am looking for an opportunity to apply my
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, my creative
problem solving
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 skills and an innovative idea to mentor students,
hence
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 make a difference. I
had
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started my journey with Thistle Hotel Manchester in
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the United
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 Kingdom as a Receptionist and in my
last
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 assignment I
had
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associated with Renaissance Hotel, Manchester, UK as a Front Office Supervisor. I had loved and enjoyed working with
diverse
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a diverse
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 multinational culture, being
lead
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 and opportunity to empower and motivate my team. I had
honored
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 with many rewards and appreciation awards like Star Of the
month
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Month
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, Spirit To Serve and Marriott Rewards goal achievement award, Mystery Guest Highest Scorecard...etc. When I arrived
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in
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 India, I had made up my mind to become a
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. I Have done
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a DECCED
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 – Diploma in Early Childhood Care and Education Development from
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the Indian
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 Technical Education Society, Mumbai and I am
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 an MBA graduate. I have
International
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an International
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 EFL teaching qualification in “TEFL with TEYL” from INTESOL WORLDWIDE, UK. (TEFL - Teaching
English
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 as a Second Language) (TEYL-Teaching
English
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 to Young Learners) I Have 2
Years
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Preschool
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of Preschool
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 TEACHING
Experience
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 from June 2016 to April 2018, where I worked as an
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assistant
.
Teacher
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 in Al Nadi Ul Falah
English
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 School. I
also
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 have 2
Years
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University
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 and College teaching
experience
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 From ITM College, Nerul, Mumbai, And Sahyog College, Thane, Mumbai.
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 I am working with VJ International CBSC School as a Primary Class
Teacher
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. I teach 3rd Std.
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,
Math’s
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 and EVS. Now I am ready for
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a challenging
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 role and
this
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 role really excites me. If given a chance I will prove to be a good
teacher
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 and a conscious member of your School. Kindly find attached Resume,
Experience
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 and Appreciation certificates. Eagerly waiting for your response, Thank you and Kind Regards, Naziya Shaikh

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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