Many working people get little or exercise either during working day or in their free time, and have health problems as well. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

It is generally observed nowadays that
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health related
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issues are very common in the professionals
who
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do
nott
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not
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take part in physical activity during their working days or even in their
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leisure
time
. There can be multiple reasons for
this
matter,
however
, in my point of view, the major reason can be
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about their own
health
. The most valuable solution for
this
matter is awareness.
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in detail.
To begin
with,
majority
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of working people focus on their goal
acheivements
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achievements
achievement
. They spend most of their
time
keep
theirselvses
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themselves
busy in doing hard work, to meet the deadlines and they forget about the
health
that is
also
their responsibility to take care of it.
This
can might be due to multiple factors including, lack of
time
, lack of awareness,
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stress, household and family responsibilities and much more.
For example
, a survey published in The
Health
magazine recently
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revealed that about 70 per cent of working individuals do not get regular exercise because they give more preference to completion of tasks rather than concentrating on their physical
health
. In my opinion, the best solution for
this
issue is to keep professionals motivated regarding the importance of their own
health
by mean of some
health
activity programmes at company levels or even at
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level.
For instance
, a widely appreciated programme has been
introdued
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introduced
by
UAE
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government for
last
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5 years, which is " Fitness 30 -30". Under
this
programme
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different activities are organized
at
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different parts of the cities
everyday
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,
throuhout
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throughout
the country, in which working people do take part in physical activities along with their families. To conclude, there is no doubt that working individuals do not perform
exercise
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on regular basis due to
unavailablity
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unavailability
availability
of
time
or due to lack of
intrest
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interest
in their personal
health
.
Therefore
,
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respect to engage working individuals in exercise, motivation plays a vital role. It will be very
fruirtful
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fruitful
if we all could make
exerrcise
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exercise
time
as
fun
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a fun
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time
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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