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Band 8

Mrs. Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. write a letter to Mrs. barrettes your letter suggest how you could help her in her home Say why you would like to do this work Explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs. Barret, I am writing with reference to your advertisement looking for house help in the upcoming summer I would like to apply for that. I could help you with your daily routine and household chores.
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, cooking snacks, sweeping, vacuuming, grocery shopping, watering the plants, mowing the lawns, weeding the gardens, and so on. Let me explain my problem in more detail currently, I am working as a customer care representative at a call centre in the evening shift and my income does not meet my expenses
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 most of the time I need to borrow money from friends and family.
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, if you consider me for
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 job I will be able to cover my expenses more effectively.
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 my hectic routine, I will be sparing my weekend for personal matters.
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, I will be assisting you on weekdays from morning until evening.
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, you can decide your convenient work hours. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Ben

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format
The greeting could be improved by using 'Dear Mrs. Barrett,' to demonstrate appropriate format and professionalism. Consistency in addressing the recipient correctly is important.
coherence
Remember to separate ideas into clear paragraphs, which you've done adequately, but aim for more fluid transitions between them.
tone
The tone of your letter is generally suitable, but ensure that the language remains formal throughout, avoiding too casual phrases that might detract from the overall professionalism.
task response
You've responded to the task fairly well, providing explanations on how you can help, your reasons for wanting the job, and your availability. Make sure to fully elaborate on each point for clarity.
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