Many children have become habitual about excessively using mobile applications day and night. Why do you think this is so? What parents can do to avoid this situation declining further?

There is no doubt that
children
are getting addicted to mobile
phones
day by day. These days
children
spend most of their time
by
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using mobile applications.
This
essay will discuss why
this
is happening and what measures should be taken to overcome
this
problem? Easy access to mobile
phones
in
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early age leads to
addiction
in youngsters.
Parents
provide mobile
phones
to their
children
when they just reach
to
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5 years. They find them as entertainment and start playing games. They use different applications as their entertainment.
For example
: recently there was
application
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named TikTok
got
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popular among every
children
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as well as teenagers
andnthey
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and they
spent most of their hours on
this
application . After looking at the
addiction
, it was banned in many countries. Another reason is that
parents
are so busy with their schedule
especially
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single
parents
. They
donot
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do not
don't
have time to
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with their
children
. Due to
lack
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the lack
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of
parents
love and togetherness, young one start using mobile
phones
as
mode
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a mode
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of entertainment. They find their happiness in mobile
applicaions
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applications
. These are
main
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the main
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reasons
of
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mobile
addiction
. There are some steps that should be taken by
parents
to reduce mobile
addiciton
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addiction
.
First
of all, it is vital that they should not provide mobile
phones
to their toddlers
in
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early age. They should keep them away and unknown to their
children
.
For instance
, during my childhood,
i
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even
didnot
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did not
didn't
know about mobile
phones
and how to use them? It was because we
didnot
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did not
didn't
have easy access to cell
phones
.
Next
to it,
parents
should take some time off from their work. So, they could stay with their
children
for some moments.
Parents
should guide them about the
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affects
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of these online applications. They should spread love and togetherness among their
youngones
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young ones
. To evaluate, it is clear that there are some causes of mobile application
addiction
among
children
and why it is increasing ?
,
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but there are some solutions as well
how
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parents
can tackle
this
problem. If we can solve
this
problem right now ,
then
we can save
this
from increasing it
further
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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