Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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Some
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believe that advertising makes
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buy products that are not needed and supporters of
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says
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that it helps
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to know about
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a new
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product
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in the market. In my opinion, advertisements might lead
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to buy
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that are not necessary for them. There could be many reasons for
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and
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essay will discuss one of them. There are many ways for advertising the
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and one of them is via influencers. There are millions of
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who follow these influencers on digital platforms. Companies give out products to them so that they could
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be promoted
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.
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, an influencer could give
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review of the
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because the company had paid them to do it. Due to
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, many
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fall into
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trap and buy the
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just because their
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online star has said it.
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,
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buy
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that are not required by them.
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, a survey done by Oxford University revealed that many
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get influenced by online creators and buy
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that are being promoted by them. They tend to spend more money than usual. I agree with
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view.
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, some
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have
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the opinion
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that advertisement
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knowledge about the
product
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in the market. When a
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is launched,
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the company
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uses different forms of media to make sure that their item
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every corner of the world.
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brings awareness
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the
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about the
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which is available in the market.
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,
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the consumer
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could make choices between
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things
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. If advertising is forced into our faces than it could make
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to
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buy
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unnecessarily. In conclusion, I agree with the view that
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of products by
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influencers could make
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buy
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out of necessity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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