Many people believe that modern music can have a negative impact on the young. Others believe the effect of modern music is positive. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Nowadays modern music is widely common and you can
tolisten
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listen
it everywhere spontaneously. People divided into two thoughts about modern rap. Most of them say it is the most harmful and have so many disadvantages to the young generation,
however
, others reckon that modern melody affects only on positive sides of listeners. If we compare modern
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with
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, as a fact,
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the modern
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soul
is more harmful than old
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, because it destroys all concentrations of our mind by its hard and harmful bits. According to some confident scientists, modern singing is able to attract some community to lots of accidents and Masonic movements without your desire. Meanwhile, they will send private voice messages to the whole world due to the
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industry. About every one of
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believe
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modern rap has more advantages than minuses. Sometimes
modern
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the modern
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soul
is as your close friend inspires you when you’re in a depression and in stressful situations. You can move in real life by rhythms of
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and forget about a bunch of problems. ,
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modern opera can be your daily motivational factor from your early morning till dark evening. In my way of thinking, it affects differently for everyone. Because I know some society who can live joyfully in an absence of
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.
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, as well as
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who addict to it and cannot imagine their life within the piece. In conclusion, everybody listens to himself, sure without becoming aberrant and abjure from things, which he doesn’t want to do.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifestyles and behaviours
  • glorify
  • distract
  • academic performance
  • self-expression
  • identity formation
  • source of inspiration
  • social and political messages
  • amplifying
  • accessible
  • influential
  • parental and educational guidance
  • critically analyze
  • responsible consumption
  • mitigate
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