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Students from disadvantaged families and rural areas are finding it difficult to get a university education in many countries. Some people believe that universities and authorities should help them so that they can get a university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In a large number of countries the world over, it is
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 to achieve a university degree down to having a poor family background and living in the nook and cranny areas, resulting in producing many unproductive and unskilled workforce.
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, there has been, in recent years, a growing body of opinion in favour of helping those underprivileged
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 by governments and
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 in order to get a tertiary
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. Being a rational mind, I, too, assent to
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 notion, for I am of the view that highly educated citizens are considerate to be conducive to changing the fate and face of a
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 and becoming an independent nation. Among the ratiocination to buttress my stance, the one that deals with the significance of higher
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 as an indispensable way of generating efficient manpower.
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, if a
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’s authorities give opportunities to all residents to enter into
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 on the basis of merit, that
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 indubitably gets a great many workforces, contributing to boosting the state of the economy. To exemplify, when in 1880, the Malaysian government took a decision regarding not to take tuition fee in public
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 for the
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’s citizen, the
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 started to see the upward change of its economy after few years. So as to bring economic development,
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, it is paramount to help destitute
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 to get a university
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. Another critical rationale in reference to why it is essential to give facilities to impoverished
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 in the case of higher
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 is necessarily synonymous with becoming a self-dependent nation. To be more precise, it would be possible to invent edge-of-the-state equipment, products, and so forth provided that a
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 had lots of high-tech and high-valued talents, leading a
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 not to hire foreign nationals to take the service for internal purposes. To cite an example, Bangladesh hires about 300 people from other nation viz. China, India in order to meet the technical skill requirements to run the garments industry.
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, higher
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 should be provided to all people
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. In essence, to have a large number of edges, it is paramount to help
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 of the lower echelon to get into
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational inequality
  • equitable society
  • financial aid
  • scholarships
  • preparatory courses
  • educational infrastructure
  • mentoring programs
  • affirmative action
  • distance learning
  • online learning
  • remote areas
  • local communities
  • aspiring students
  • financial constraints
  • bridging the gap
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