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Some individuals argue people should buy only local products rather than foreign products. do you agree or disagree

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Some individuals argue
people
 should buy only local products rather than foreign products. In my opinion, I personally disagree with
this
 opinion because it could lead to many disadvantages for any
country
's progress. The essay will
further
 discuss points with appropriate examples to demonstrate the argument in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with,
people
 could get any product even if it is not available in their
country
. For the production of any
goods
, geographical factors are taken into consideration. One
country
 can not grow and produce all the
goods
 and services a nation requires or
want
Correct subject-verb agreement
wants
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.
For example
, Canada's climatic condition does not allow to grow cotton
as a result
country
 imports cotton from the nation.
This
 proves that buying a product from
the other
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another
show examples
country
 provides them with varieties even if it is not available in their nation.
Furthermore
, importing and exporting
impacts
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impact
show examples
 any
country
's economy because globalization makes it a 'piece of cake' for all nations to trade and robust their economies. When an exporter
country
 exports; it has to pay
Goods
 and services tax to the importer
country
, which amounts counted as an income source.
For instance
, Australia exports wine to China and
also
paying
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pays
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 GST on it;
this
 trade generates income for the Chinese government.If
people
 in China would stop to buy wine from Australia, it could create a detrimental impact on the economy. In conclusion, buying
goods
 from other countries
impart
Verb problem
provides
show examples
 us with variety, which may not be locally available, but
also
 helps us to build a healthy
economical
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economic
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 structure for countries.
Nonetheless
,
people
 should be locally produced
as well as
 imported products to maintain a balance.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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