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Some individuals argue people should buy only local products rather than foreign products. do you agree or disagree

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Some individuals argue
people
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 should buy only local products rather than foreign products. In my opinion, I personally disagree with
this
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 opinion because it could lead to many disadvantages for any
country
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's progress. The essay will
further
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 discuss points with appropriate examples to demonstrate the argument in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with,
people
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 could get any product even if it is not available in their
country
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. For the production of any
goods
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, geographical factors are taken into consideration. One
country
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 can not grow and produce all the
goods
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 and services a nation requires or
want
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wants
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.
For example
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, Canada's climatic condition does not allow to grow cotton
as a result
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country
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 imports cotton from the nation.
This
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 proves that buying a product from
the other
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another
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country
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 provides them with varieties even if it is not available in their nation.
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, importing and exporting
impacts
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impact
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 any
country
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's economy because globalization makes it a 'piece of cake' for all nations to trade and robust their economies. When an exporter
country
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 exports; it has to pay
Goods
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 and services tax to the importer
country
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, which amounts counted as an income source.
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, Australia exports wine to China and
also
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paying
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pays
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 GST on it;
this
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 trade generates income for the Chinese government.If
people
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 in China would stop to buy wine from Australia, it could create a detrimental impact on the economy. In conclusion, buying
goods
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 from other countries
impart
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provides
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 us with variety, which may not be locally available, but
also
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 helps us to build a healthy
economical
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economic
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 structure for countries.
Nonetheless
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,
people
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 should be locally produced
as well as
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 imported products to maintain a balance.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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