Some people think that sports played in teams are better than individual sports. Others don’t think so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Different sports
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different playing rules. While some are
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within a group of members, there are others
which
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are played with only one
person
in
field
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. At
present
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there is an opinion that being in
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with a
team
is better than being a lone wolf. Personally, I happily go with
this
view,
however
, forthcoming paragraphs will shed light on both viewpoints. Performing in teams can help an individual to develop certain skills that are not possible to
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in
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sports. It teaches you how to act in front of a crowd constituting people of different behavioural traits. All the members get to know about confiding in each other while aiming
on
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a single goal. When you are in a
team
, most importantly, at victorious times you will have someone around you to celebrate just as in hard times you will have each other's back.
Nonetheless
, all of
this
is not as easy as it seems, to get
this
done co-ordination coupled with understanding are two key skills essentially required in an efficient
team
.
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hand
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single player
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sports have their own
benfits
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and setbacks. As in these
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activities

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individual is not dependent on anyone else, he/she can accentuate the skills easily by
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against the clock.
Furthermore
, the popularity gains will be only in
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of that
person
seen in the field. Professionally,
this
is quite beneficial for an athlete,
however
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personally it is not, due to the fact that during
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and downs of life you always
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someone to help you out. To summarise, I would just say that people have contrasting views. While some see advantages in teams, others see in performing alone. According to my eyes, being in a
team
is always better as it teaches a
person
how to become good at relationships, which in turn benefits the
person
for
thier
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